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Falling from the sky
An amorphous mass of di-polar moments
Links and bonds of crystalline matrices
Form in an infinite array of linear vectors
Similar in content
Individual in form
Spinning and falling in a frenetic dance against gravity
Landing ever so soft, to it's temporary rest.

Until the Spring...the Sun.....
Molecular momentum
Brownian Motion
Hydrogen bonds cease to bind
Unchained from it's terrestrial prison
It will achieve formlessness again
To achieve freedom....
To travel on.....
To begin the journey again.

Posted on: 2005/12/6 21:19
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Opened my eyes this morning
A blanket over all
Everywhere, white, virgin, snow

Posted on: 2005/12/7 2:02
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Can you strike the wind?
Caressed by the wind I talk with it.
Can you throw the earth?
Nourished by the earth, I cultivate it.
Can you grapple with the fire?
Warmed by the fire I feed it.
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Commentary...
Poem #1
I enjoy poems about snow in Winter because I rarely see the stuff and I work so much I sometimes forget what season it is.

When I was learned how to write scientific articles I was taught that, while jargon can express complicated ideas concisely, it should be avoided whenever possible because, as applied, it often obscures simple ideas. In other words, people not necessarily familiar with concepts like dipoles, hydrogen bonding, or vectors will necessarily miss the some of the author's message.

On the other hand, I got the drift.

Poem #2
I have no comment about Barry's poem except to say that I am shocked that although he lives minutes from me, his Winter weather is completely different. And Barry, if you dig 8" under "virgin" snow and find a spent condom, can you be sure that the snow is still virginal? I need to know!

Poem #3
Excellent poem. Like snow, it left no after-taste for a hack like me to latch onto and criticize. But can you be that clever with a name like Gracielda?

Posted on: 2005/12/19 8:01
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oops, there goes any credibility I may have had!

"When I was learned how to write" should be "When I was learning how to write".

Thank goodness for administrative staff.

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Pete; Ok, smart guy, so what say I assign you next class to show use of a condom against migi suki.
Better show up prepared.
Barry

Posted on: 2005/12/19 9:11
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Barry,
I'm too tired to run, I've been dealing with my in-laws. Therefore, my strategy for a tsuki would be to let you hit me and take a pill the morning after.

Pete

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Snow Redux:

Snow fall down,
Snow is Cold,
Sun come out,
Snow Go Away....
Bye Bye Snow!

Posted on: 2005/12/20 22:38
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Wow, Badkarma!
What you said is genius!
Fits right in to Shindenfudoryu. Sorry I didn't understand your first poem. I am not a very good at big words.I did learn alot, though. Shawn liked it.
Thanks for the redo.
Barry

Posted on: 2005/12/21 1:05
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Can you grapple with the fire?
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Fire...bad!
New snow-poem...good.

Posted on: 2005/12/21 3:23
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