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It wouldn't be fair for me to critique anyone else's poetry if I wasn't willing to allow my own self a kick or three in the groinal regions!

And who knows perhaps this poem will become a seasonal favorite around your hearth.


holiday gas attack
pnl

slowly leaking
warm, sticky foam
smoking chunks of steel seek young, fleshy home
rusty vines and severed feet
wild poppies drink what i slowly leak

so
much violence
i learned to be so cruel
and i see my friends dangling in the concertina
i know it won’t be long

my knees:
too weak to stand
i’ll crawl to you on tingling hands
when gas comes washing in
will my pale mistress take my hand
and say, “you belong to me”?

Posted on: 2005/12/21 3:55
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Holiday Gas Attack-(no anti-depressants required)

Under-cooked Turkey,
Guts Churning.
Pressure building deep within,
Time to blame the Dog Again!

Happy Holidays!

Wil

Posted on: 2005/12/23 9:17
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Wil,
For my money,you are supergenius (try and top that Barry)!
Your poem is a ringing endorsement for crown roast. I like mine well done and served on a bed of fleece.

Pete

Posted on: 2005/12/23 9:29
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you guys (lol) have made my day. Now, I am really ready for a new year!!
Barry

Ground soft and squishy
some call them "landmines"
What's that on the bottom
of my shoe?

Posted on: 2005/12/23 14:33
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Caressed by the wind I talk with it.
Can you throw the earth?
Nourished by the earth, I cultivate it.
Can you grapple with the fire?
Warmed by the fire I feed it.
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Hahaha
It's interesting to see how a cultural kinda topic can be turned into a pile of ....

Hmmm.. what did our beloved admin say in the last Podcast Episode? "Hopefully the poetry section will gradually improve" Well.... I dunno
But it definitely gave me a good laugh for today

Eva

Posted on: 2005/12/24 1:24
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Heck guys (I mean Jason and Barry), you crapped (lit.) all over my WWI themed poem: death by artillery shrapnel vs. death by gas (sulfur mustard). You know, the inevitability of death, a prayer for peace on earth, that kinda stuff?

And Jason,
It looks like no one is going to take you to task for using "booby trap" with "round, soft, and squishy"? Then I won't either since, with those 5 words you have described the one fascination I have kept since I was a new-born

Eva...

Ideas were freely swapped
some round/soft
all squishy
Put four poetry-persons in the same room
and they might leak warm-sticky poems

Happy!

Posted on: 2005/12/26 5:20
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Ideas were freely swapped
some round/soft
all squishy
Put four poetry-persons in the same room
and they might leak warm-sticky poems


Hey,

No problem with squishy line,
nor with dirty, witty line,
until our mood is still high,
and we can have a glass of wine!

Smile :)

Posted on: 2005/12/26 7:37
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Ideas were freely swapped
some round/soft
all squishy
Put four poetry-persons in the same room
and they might leak warm-sticky poems


Ahhh, s....d it up, and can't seem to be able to correct it in the original. So here's the correct one...

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Hey,

No problem with squishy line,
nor with dirty, witty rhyme,
until our mood is still high,
and we can have a glass of wine!

Smile :)

Posted on: 2005/12/26 7:49
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Human emotions,Common Threads
Placed in tiny bottles,
Cast into a sea of electricity
for everyone's inspection,

Some see War,Some see Peace,
Others streams and "Piles"
Relationships formed from messages sent,
Providing many of us with "Smiles",

Poetry forged in the inner eye,
In the crucible of the soul,
Is never bound by "improvements"
Or some "Higher Standard" Goal,

We cast it out upon the waves,
Never to take it back,
But hope others will embrace it,
And Inspire them to act.

Buffu Ikkan!
-Wil

Posted on: 2005/12/26 9:01
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